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‘How does my living value of inclusive cultural competence, contributes both to practice and knowledge creation with the marginalised’?

 
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‘How does my living value of inclusive cultural competence, contributes both to practice and knowledge creation with the marginalised’?
by Shelagh Hetreed - Wednesday, 19 December 2012, 5:03 PM
 

My mission is to open minds to the complexity, the connectedness of each of us, rather than the differences and to share the richness of our diversity and the sense of responsibility for justice across our pluralistic society. I would appreciate help with improving this account by your critical and helpful suggestions.

 

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Re: ‘How does my living value of inclusive cultural competence, contributes both to practice and knowledge creation with the marginalised’?
by Jacqueline Delong - Thursday, 20 December 2012, 9:38 PM
 

Hi, Shelagh. It has been rather confusing trying to respond to your paper. The actual paper without the appendices is rather limited in scope and evidence but the appendices are wonderful. The trouble is that I am experiencing difficulty accessing the appendices. So, here is my response, given that I saw the appendices once but cannot now access them:

In the main paper, your courage in sharing your trauma as a survivor is inspirational. The experiences in the appendices are, as well. The main paper seems like, and this is just my impression, a summary or abbreviation. As such it suffers from a lack of detail and supportive evidence...until I read the appendices.

Your paper describes your experiences but does not talk about how it has informed your research. There are many claims to know but until we see the appendices, we are hearing only your voice. The appendices give the evidence to support the claims to know. Could they or summaries of them be included?
The paper would be strengthened with more explanation.

In mechanical terms, direct quotations (short ones) require full quotation marks and page numbers. It is unclear to me as to the purpose of the use of single quotation marks. You might consider how you would break the Introduction section into headings with chunks of information and how your writing might flow more smoothly. Links between the different sections would help the flow of the paper.

Generally, the experiences described reveal much reflection and growth: a narrative that we as practitioner-researchers need to hear and understand. You have made impressive contributions to improving the lives of some of the most vulnerable people.


If these changes can be made, I would recommend the paper for publication. As it stands, I feel that it is not ready for publication. If I can be of any help, please contact me at jddelong@gmail.com


Love, Jackie

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Re: ‘How does my living value of inclusive cultural competence, contributes both to practice and knowledge creation with the marginalised’?
by Shelagh Hetreed - Thursday, 10 January 2013, 7:16 AM
 
Dear Jackie,

I have only just discovered your response! I am not yet familiar with the forum. Getting there!
Thank you for your encouraging words and informative constructive comments.
There was much compromise in the writing of this paper and your suggestions are extremely valuable for re energising my ambition to write the 'unfettered' edition.
I will need to investigate the problems with accessing the appendices. You are right, the body of the paper relies totally on their presence.
So grateful. My first review!
Thank you and for offers of further support.

Shelagh

 

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Re: ‘How does my living value of inclusive cultural competence, contributes both to practice and knowledge creation with the marginalised’?
by Jerry Allender - Sunday, 20 January 2013, 8:21 PM
 
Dear Shelagh,

There is no question that the work you do is critically important in the world. The many communities that need attention, caring and support that you have served is remarkable. Thank you. Our world needs more like you.

My concern with your paper as it has been written is this. I cannot find a sense of educational research in it. Rather it reports your journey and the development of your understanding of your journey to your place as a fighter for social justice. It does not connect us with how your learning informs our journey as fighters for social justice. I believe research has to provide learning for the readers to be able to make changes in their lives. You present your life experience as unique which indeed it is and indeed it is very courageous of you to explore it publicly. I would imagine such an exploration would be most fitting for an ethnography journal and very interesting as such.

This journey is one way of developing a sense of social justice. I, for example, was raised in a middle class intellectual socialist home. My sense of social justice was in my mother's milk. Not through shame and abuse but through a sense of responsibility and survival. If we all do not prosper, we all will suffer. A very different journey but one that lead to the same end. I wonder if your research could include some of the possible ways we instill that sensibility we each have. For me that would be research. How do you help your students become fighters for social justice? How is it your experience brought you there when for many it would have brought them to a very different place? What makes it difficult to instill this critical sense in young people?

As to the structure of the paper, the first three pages need serious revision. You spend far too much space telling us what you intend to do: I clarify and communicate, I have built on, I intend to, I want to intervene, I am seeking to clarify, I seek, My mission.There are more. But the problem is not your intentions, it is that they become a list of promises that it is unnecessary to make. This section needs to be tightened and the intention more clearly explained.

The story of your journey needs to be enriched. Your appendices are the richer part of the paper. They could be incorporated in some way. But not as a list of your very worthy accomplishments but as information of how you developed.

I have a very personal issue. I do not know what BMC, OFSTED, or BME mean. I feel foolish asking for it is clear that everyone knows what they mean. I do not so please let readers like me know.

I hope this is useful to you. I realize that it may be pressing on you in a way that is not worthwhile to you. If that is so, just delete this. If it is worthwhile to you, I will look forward to your continued work on this project.

in peace,

Donna Allender