Kelly and Sabre, I feel like my life has been enhanced by reading this paper!  I resonate deeply with the values you put forth--as a person and as an educator.  I love the multi-cultural references, as well as the actual references you cite. Some of the authors I also like to quote; others I look forward to getting familiar with.  As a professional within a Steiner/Waldorf school, I share the approach you are advocating. Thank you!

I have inserted a number of comments that I think would strengthen this paper. 

First, I think it would help to identify your context of inquiry learning more up front in the intro. Then your reflections have a place to nest.

Explicitly connecting the experiences you had in the skype convos to love and relationships would also help me follow your thinking directly and give more credence to the points you are making.

I have used inserted comments that appear on the side of the doc, as well as read text between paragraphs for broader concepts.  I also highlighted in a couple areas to clue myself to something important that you were referring to that I wanted to come back to.

I am really looking forward to seeing the next iteration and to sharing this article with others.

Aloha,

Jocelyn