Bravo,Caitriona! A beautifully written article that will be of great help to other educators about Inquiry Based Learning (IBL). Your passion to improve as a liberating teacher, to influence others in a life-affirming, need-fulfilling, and performance enhancing manner, and passion to improve your pedagogy to inspire students to value their own construction of learning was inspiring! It was an honor and priviledge to contribute to the process of publishing your article.
I offer you editing recommendations which can be found in the attachment, I hope you find the notes to improve the article helpful. Feel free to email me to discuss my editorial comments at email@example.com. I hope my review of your work will help accentuate the excellence of your writing. I firmly believe your article is worthy of publication in the next issue of EJOLTs and thank you for the learning I garnered from reading your work.
You wrote a high quality article which you should feel proud of writing. I am a fan!
I eagerly look forward to seeing your article published in the next issue of EJOLTs!
Thank for the time and attention you gave to my article. Your kind words mean a lot to me.
I have read over your comments and I feel that that your suggestions are very helpful and will improve my work. I will take some time over the weekend to rewrite the article and incorporate the suggested amendments.
Thank you again for your generous praise and support,
I have to join the chorus of praise for your work. It is exceptionally clearly presented, and you have been careful to provide evidence of ethical and passionate practice. One thing I particularly appreciate (having had to drum this into my own action researching students) is the way you provide a 'snail trail' or clear steps of what you did and how you did it. You don't expect the reader to make assumptions.
You also demonstrate considerable strengths of triangulating your data. Your combination of self-reflection, student videos, photographic evidence and power point information helps us to see that yours is a robust inquiry.
I haven't read Dr Barry's feedback, it's too busy a time of year, but there are one or two very minor typos that you'll probably pick up before the final iteration. I wouldn't change anything except these, I think. Well done.
Pip Bruce Ferguson