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Working on vulnerabilities and failures: Improving my practice leading an educational initiative concerned with emotional intelligence

Working on vulnerabilities and failures: Improving my practice leading an educational initiative concerned with emotional intelligence

by Bhawana Shrestha -
Number of replies: 9

Hi, EJOLTs reviewers and colleagues,

I have addressed some of the issues that had been pointed out by the blind-reviewers. I might still have missed out on some important commentary that might have added value to my paper. This is my first time sharing my narrative with the world and that makes me both nervous well as joyous. 

Looking forward to your comments and excited to be seeing my own growth while I contribute to the flourishing of humanity. 

Warm regards,

Bhawana Shrestha


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Re: Working on vulnerabilities and failures: Improving my practice leading an educational initiative concerned with emotional intelligence

by Bernie Sullivan -

Hi Bhawana,

I have really enjoyed reading your paper. It is a well-thought -out paper, investigating a number of concepts as you explore your own vulnerabilities and perceived failures. You have demonstrated how, through critical self-reflection, you have moved beyond these initial feelings to develop your living Educational Theory that has contributed to the flourishing of humanity.

The paper is well structured and generally your train of thought is easy to follow. There are a few things that would help to strengthen the paper and make it more accessible for your readers. i have marked these on the paper but will summarise them here for you:

1. There are a few instances where more clarification is needed - what is very obvious to you may not be easily understood by others.

2. In some places, you begin your discussion by referring to 'we/our' and then change to 'they/their'. For the sake of consistency, it would be better to use the same pronoun throughout.

3. There is a sentence that seems to me to be a quote from Polanyi, but it is not attributed to him, so it might be a good idea to check this out.

4. In a few references, instead of page numbers you have written (para). Is this because the page number is not available?

5. In the references, there are two books where the publisher and place of publication do not correspond with those on my copies of the books. It could be that they have been published by more than one company, but it would be a good idea to check it out.

I will attach the guideline form to this, Bhawana, and I will send the annotated paper separately. I look forward to the next iteration of your paper.

Kind regards,

Bernie.

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Re: Working on vulnerabilities and failures: Improving my practice leading an educational initiative concerned with emotional intelligence

by Bhawana Shrestha -
Thank you very much.
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Re: Working on vulnerabilities and failures: Improving my practice leading an educational initiative concerned with emotional intelligence

by Stephen Bigger -
Working through it now, I should post soon.
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Re: Working on vulnerabilities and failures: Improving my practice leading an educational initiative concerned with emotional intelligence

by Stephen Bigger -
Hi Bhawana, I have been through your paper, enjoyed it and think you offer a powerful reflection. There are some suggestions for you to think about, given in notes on your paper, attached. I have not repeated Bernie's comments but agree you should consider these too. This is the substance.
1. Your paper is on the border between action research and autoethnography Jack offers a discussion towards the end of his 2018 book Living Theory Research as a way of life. It is both ... and, not either ... or.
2. Your opening needs rephrasing. I can work out what you mean but for a wider audience, give them a smoother start.
3. I give a personal take on a point you make which you may or may not find useful.
4. Truth and reality as constructed are big topics - you may need a reading here.
5. I offer a personal take on the introvert/extrovert discuss you have here. Again you may find it helpful
6. I like your examples of validity.
So well done. The paper is long. If you are adding anything you may need to take out words elsewhere.
Notes on the paper attached, the pro forma will come later today. Stephen
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Re: Working on vulnerabilities and failures: Improving my practice leading an educational initiative concerned with emotional intelligence

by Parbati Dhungana -
Dear Bhawana,
I am 'living joy'!  I will share my comments soon.
Best wishes!
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Re: Working on vulnerabilities and failures: Improving my practice leading an educational initiative concerned with emotional intelligence

by Parbati Dhungana -

Dear Bhawana,

I loved the way you expressed your emotions in this paper. This way I feel more connected with you.

I have made some comments in the paper. Please find the attachment. Here are some of my observations:

1. Some of the words need to be clearly defined.

2. Connection of your thinking with others might make it of high academic and scholarly quality

3. More evidence and references would make your paper much much better

4. In some of the places you have left without discussing the quotations. I think at least a sentence summing up the quote would be better.

5. Revisiting with a fresh look might improve the conclusion section. 


I wish you all the best!