Hi Amy and Sonia,
My name is Sadruddin, one of the reviewers of your paper.
It is very nice to read your living theory of mutuality that
has been an inspirational piece of paper for me to know about your joint
venture towards creating your collaborative living theory account. Starting with
a relationship of mentor mentee to becoming equally contributing partners in an
innovative way of collaborative method of inquiry highly engages reader to make
sense of understanding the concept of ‘co-evolving’ with shared values of your
I think, your living theory account better demonstrates
how you both came to realize, over a period of time, your common/similar values
of love and hope as your embodied values of practices that depict through very
long engagement of emails and Skypes. However, somewhere sometimes the reader
may get lost in these long narratives/discussions and dialogues that might need
to reduce to a desirable level to just maintain its explanatory principles of
living theory account rather writing unnecessary details, sometimes, with
repetitions. Probably, you can reflect critically on your additional sources used
to justify your claims.
For example, if few of the selected and relevant
explanations of your (Amy and Sonia’s) lived experiences (of love and care for
self and others) come within the text to explain your living theory of
mutuality would be more engaging for readers to develop better understanding of
your claims rather letting those details in appendix (pp. 24 to 46).
Probably, you can better engage your readers even by inserting
textboxes within your script to provide desired evidences on the site of text that
could increase more engagement of readers instead to going back to appendix for
Moreover, if you reflect on your definition of spirituality
that to me appears to be embedded within your collaborative embodied values of
love and care. In other words, to me, it is the spirituality that engages you
both to generate love and care for self and others.
I have given few comments within the text that could be a
point of reflection for you. I guess, references part also demands to fix few
of the issues here and there.
However, if these views on your paper make no sense and
you might get hurt, I must say sorry for that.
With best regards and