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relections on the development of a Black African Male Educator anf Gifts of Thesis writing

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Re: relections on the development of a Black African Male Educator anf Gifts of Thesis writing
by Moira Laidlaw - Monday, 5 February 2018, 11:31 AM

Hello Jerome. I am delighted to be acting as one of your reviewers again, and I want to say how much I have enjoyed your new article. I find such joy and hope in it, qualities so significant for education, in my opinion. Your paper brings the reader into a place of change and reflection and diligence and hope and vision. I felt as if I were experiencing something of your own journey as you took the reader through the various stages of your educational development and its impact on other people you were working with. I love the inclusion of your own poetic writings, as these - to my mind - lend the paper a kind of truth that it is easy to leave behind in academic articles.

I have a significant criticism and a more minor one.

Throughout the paper you make claims which you don't often offer evidence for. You say you felt, or understood differently, and this impacted on the work you did subsequently. But I don't often see evidence for that, perhaps in examples or even anecdotes. Your paper is full of claims, but, if I may say so, doesn't always do them justice, or breathe life into them with examples where you lived your new truths.

I wonder if, for the sake of keeping to upper word limits for EJOLTS papers, you might claim less and offer the reader more in terms of substance. I don't want to kill off the life of your paper - because it is sometimes to be found in the poetic power of the writing that some of the life of it resides. However, as an academic paper for EJOLTS, I believe the lack of evidence to be a weakness.

The minor criticism is that your paper is not yet presented in the correct format for publication in EJOLTS and this will also need to taken care of if I am to recommend it for publication.

Jerome, I think this is a really important paper and it needs to be published. The poetry of it demands publication.

I have written quite a lot on the paper itself - which I attach here.

I hope that my comments are encouraging and not demotivating in any way. If they are, then I have pitched my response unwisely. I believe in this paper. I believe in its power to communicate even more strongly, if some of the amendments are made.

Warmest regards, Moira